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subway air . . .
my wife and I talk
about adoption

l'air du metro . . .
ma femme et moi parlons
d'adoption


Nicholas David Klacsanzky , Ukraine
cco 2018-09-2

Commentaire.

Voici un bel exemple d'ellipse dans le discours. Le haïku est composé de trois segments sémantiques mis en rapport par une partie absente explicitement (la surpopulation). Cette technique permet une grande économie de moyens pour condenser un discours large dans un petit espace. A bien étudier et intégrer. On peut aussi remarquer une juxtaposition entre les éléments important de notre vie : les autres (L1), moi et mon couple (L2), l'enfant (L3). Vu autrement, il s'agit d'un discours du type "Moi et le Monde". Un haïku beaucoup plus dense qu'il n'y apparait...

Keywords

metro couple family child

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss040 Me and the World.
  Motif : mmm079 - Me and the World.

Used techniques :


* ellipse - Ellipsis.
Ellipsis: Only the minimum is said but the whole situation can be reconstruct by the reader.
This is also the case when only a part of the discourse is present. The remaining part can be guessed by the reader.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* absence - Ellipsis.
Ellipsis: Only the minimum is said but the whole situation can be reconstruct by the reader.
This is also the case when only a part of the discourse is present. The remaining part can be guessed by the reader.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-aut - Author's role

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_MoiMonde - I versus the World

Mention d'un être qui se dstincte par rapport au reste du Monde.

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