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Analysis of the Haiku structure

subway air . . .
my wife and I talk
about adoption

l'air du metro . . .
ma femme et moi parlons
d'adoption


Nicholas David Klacsanzky , Ukraine
cco 2018-09-2

Commentaire.

Voici un bel exemple d'ellipse dans le discours. Le haïku est composé de trois segments sémantiques mis en rapport par une partie absente explicitement (la surpopulation). Cette technique permet une grande économie de moyens pour condenser un discours large dans un petit espace. A bien étudier et intégrer. On peut aussi remarquer une juxtaposition entre les éléments important de notre vie : les autres (L1), moi et mon couple (L2), l'enfant (L3). Vu autrement, il s'agit d'un discours du type "Moi et le Monde". Un haïku beaucoup plus dense qu'il n'y apparait...

Keywords

metro couple family child

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm079 -

Used techniques :

* ellipse - Ellipsis.
Ellipsis: Only the minimum is said but the whole situation can be reconstruct by the reader.
This is also the case when only a part of the discourse is present. The remaining part can be guessed by the reader.

* absence - The main element is not explicit.
The haiku is structured around an unnamed element to which each image refers. The interest is to save the space that would be used by naming the element while having the effect it produces.

The haiku can appear as a vault from which the scaffolding has been removed. If the haiku is well composed, the main element is absent but everything refers to it.

This technique delays storage in memory because the reader must complete the discourse with the unnamed element so that the haiku is unambiguously understandable. It then acquires a higher memory weight.

* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_MoiMonde - I versus the World

Mention d'un être qui se dstincte par rapport au reste du Monde.

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