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Analysis of the Haiku structure

ma maison d’enfance
par un carreau entrevoir
l’obscurité


Philippe Macé, France
cco 2018-09-2

Commentaire.

Discours feuilleté, discours à plusieurs niveaux de lecture. Une merveille de composition, tant par le sujet, que par la profondeur. Ce haïku trouve sa force dans l'archetype de la Fenêtre, un Passage vers le Passé. Le fil du discours nous mène de l'objectif, du souvenir heureux vers du subjectif, de l'obscur. Un effet de zoom temporel rare. L'ouverture finale est maximale par le mystère (yugen) qu'elle entrevoit, là-bas, dans le noir.

Keywords

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Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

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* psycho - Haiku with a psychological background.
Haiku can have a reading level that expresses an underlying psychological situation that is still active. It is not sure if this analysis is accurate. It can simply exist in the reader's mind. It is almost always absent from the author's intention, as can be seen from the author's request for information.

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Fenetre - A Window to another world.

Il s'agit d'une ouverture par laquelle on voit autre chose. Une fenêtre qui permet de voir un autre monde. Un miroir qui montre le monde.

A mettre en liaison avec l'archetype des mondes parallèles.

* A_Passé - The Past.

* A_Passage - The Crossing, the Transition.

Tout ce qui est le passage d'une étape, d'une borne, d'un état à l'autre. Le franchissement d'un col, le passage d'une barrière séparant deux zones. Les ponts, solstices, nouvel-an...

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.

* T_PassePresent - Bubble of Past.

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