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Analysis of the Haiku structure

california poppies--
the faint scent
of asphalt

coquelicots de Californie --
la légère odeur
d'asphalte


Sondra Byrnes, USA
cco 2018-09-2

Commentaire.

Un bel effet combinant deux perceptions (vision et olfaction), une synesthésie toujours très efficace. La force de ce haïku réside cependant dans la juxtaposition improbable, une opposition entre le Sauvage et notre monde mécanique. Il y a à fleur de perception une opposition entre le parfum (lié à l'image de la fleur) et l'odeur arômatique de l'asphalte chaud. Même si le coquelicot ne sent pas. Opposition aussi entre le jaune orange et le noir. Haïku riche !Le coquelicot de Californie (Eschscholzia californica) est la fleur officielle de cet état des Etats-Unis.

Keywords

flower color road smell

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* multisens - Synestesia - Multi-senses perception.
Haïkus using effects on several senses (hearing, touch, taste, vision, smell). They play on the phenomenon of resonance between feelings (Synesthesia). This device usually produces strong haikus because they are physical.

* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_Nature -

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