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Analysis of the Haiku structure

echoing
in the cup . . .
winter prayers

faisant écho
dans la tasse. . .
des prières d'hiver


Nicholas David Klacsanzky , Ukraine
cco 2018-10-1

Commentaire.

Haïku de temps lent, chargé de mystère par L3. Haïku d'atmosphère noté juste par une touche en L12. L'atmosphère est cependant créée par L3. Des prières spécifiques à l'hiver éveillent dans notre Imaginaire des images de froid, d'obscurité, de neige... Efficace.

Keywords

cup religion sound

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

Archetypes and dialectics

* T_Lent - Slow Time.

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