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Analysis of the Haiku structure

dandelion field
my voice dissipates
in the wind

champ de pissenlits
ma voix se disperse
dans le vent


Debbi Antebi, UK
cco 2018-10-1

Commentaire.

Haïku basé sur la similitude. Le sujet en L2 est remplacé mais l'image persiste et on s'aperçoit à peine du glissement, non de sens, mais de sujet. En fait, L2 n'a de force que parce que L1. La juxtaposition réussie est le moteur de ce haïku. Il y a une rupture dans le discours de surface (champ versus voix), mais le discours profond est homogène et continu (dispersion dans le vent). Chapeau.

Keywords

dandelion voice field sound wind flower

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* trans_S - Transition in the surface discourse.
Surface transition.

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Espace - The Space.

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