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Analysis of the Haiku structure

matin radieux d'automne~
un soupçon de je ne sais quoi
dans le café


Sarra Masmoudi, Tunisie
cco 2018-10-2

Commentaire.

Haïku yugen. Tout semble clair et simple mais il y a ce quelque chose non-dit, qui affleure la conscience et qui trouble l'image. On pourrait y voir au plan superficiel, une ellipse du discours. Ce petit quelque chose, présent dans le café (noir profond) , inquiète et donne sa force au haïku. On pourrait reprocher la présence de l'auteure, mais c'est pour moi secondaire et d'ailleurs nécessaire à la constitution de l'image.

Keywords

morning coffee taste

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_ChoseActiveEnfouie - Hidden active things

Toute chose non nommée enfouie dans des profondeurs, qui serait active et produirait des effets perceptibles. Concept de l'Inconscient.
A différencier de la Chose Cachée, qui n'a pas d'activité au niveau profond.

* A_Indice - The clue, the sign, the revealing detail.

Quelque chose, un détail, nous révèle une chose cachée ou invisible.

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.

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