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Analysis of the Haiku structure

parking
dans le souffle du vent
une odeur verte


Carole Bourdages, Canada
cco 2018-10-2

Commentaire.

Haïku fait d'une juxtaposition d'éléments qui vont constituer une image. Opposition entre le monde construit, urbain et la Nature, soulignée par le souffle du vent. Mais sa force provient pour moi, de la couleur verte. Les odeurs ne sont pas vertes. Et pourtant, il existe dans le haïku classique japonais, des cris et vents noirs. On peut plus probablement y voir une allusion à l'odeur de vert, caractéristique de l'herbe fraichement coupée; ce qui est cohérent avec l'opposition. Une odeur entêtante.

Keywords

wind smell urban color green

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Indice - The clue, the sign, the revealing detail.

Quelque chose, un détail, nous révèle une chose cachée ou invisible.

* A_ChoseActive - The clue, the sign, the revealing detail.

Quelque chose, un détail, nous révèle une chose cachée ou invisible.

* D_Sauvage - Domesticated <> Wild.

* - Domesticated <> Wild.

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