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deleting
my pregnancy app
autumn rain


Lucy Whitehead , UK
cco 2018-10-2

Commentaire.

Haïku très lourd psychologiquement. Le sujet profond est traité avec une grande économie de mots. Le contexte est alourdi en fin par une mention meteo qui ajoute des connotations de froid, de peine à ce haïku très fort. A remarquer qu'il s'agit d'une transition (L1-L2) dans un Temps continu.(L3). La structure de type S21 (césure après L2) laisse au Temps lent la suite du discours.

Keywords

smartphone pregnant rain autumn

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* meteo - Meteo used to create an atmosphere.
Use in a haiku segment of a reference to the weather (weather conditions) that provides more than just the mention of the weather as a background. The reference refers to a state of weather that has physical (cold rain, sudden hail, frost,...) or psychological (overcast sky, storm warning, sultry afternoon...) effects. These effects are mainly felt through the skin (contact, temperature,...); which connects the author/reader to the World (his direct environment).

The mentioned weather and its effects share a set of semes (brutality, unpredictability, "cold", psychologically oppressive climate,...) with the situation experienced by the author.

A sudden and unpleasant change of situation shares semes (brutality, unpredictability, impact) with a sudden storm, hail, cold rain. A hard time to live, a disappointment, with a cold rain. An overcast weather before the rain shares with a moment when we fear the occurrence of events that we fear.

Although the meteo is often used as a marker (kigo - word of season), it sometimes brings more than just the place in the season or the context of the moment.

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

Archetypes and dialectics

* T_Transition - Transition in Time between two states.

- Le moment où la situation passe d'un état à un autre ou va le faire.
- C'est aussi le moment "juste avant". (A vérifier car il faut le différencier du T_FuturPresent) Ici, c'est un futur certain et immédiat (comme en chinois).

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