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tableau de bord ~
au dessus du gilet jaune
un piège à rêves


Bikko, France
cco 2018-11-2

Commentaire.

Voici un très bel exemple d'un haïku de protestation efficace. Le message n'est pas dit explicitement, comme dans tous les haïkus 'à message' (en général ratés). L'auteur laisse le lecteur l'extraire lui-même. Mieux qu'un long discours, ce haïku nous dit le désarroi des révoltés. Mais au-delà, c'est de la difficulté d'une révolte, de ses errements, de ses illusions et désillusions, de ses tragédies qu'il nous parle. Chapeau ! Aborder les situations complexes par le détail. Voilà comme on écrit un haïku efficace.

Keywords

social protest

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* association - Associations.
Images in association. Interaction comes from the sharing of only a part of the semes. There are no similarities or oppositions that create a dynamic. However, the relationship is stronger than in the juxtaposition that places images side by side without semantic relationships between them.

* engagé - Committed haïku.
Haïku with a political message or opinion, an involvement

* culturel - Use of external cultural reference.
The haiku is based on an external cultural element, well known by the reader. There is a sharing of an environment (place, situation...) or cultural element (music, painting...) that will seek memories or sensations in the memory and experience of the reader. This device saves a lot of space, nothing else is needed, the effect is achieved by the reader's contribution.

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

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* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

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