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Analysis of the Haiku structure

approaching rain
the smell of sauerkraut
lingers on the stairs

la pluie arrive
l'odeur de choucroute
traîne dans les escaliers


Polona Oblak, Slovenia
cco 2018-11-2

Commentaire.

Un haïku particulier. D'abord par une odeur désagréable, rarement citée, puis le rapprochement avec la pluie qui arrive. On pourrait cependant y voir une liaison, peut-être un dicton meteorologique basé sur la pression atmosphérique ou l'humidité. Au delà, c'est le rapprochement inattendu entre les trois élements (exprimés chacun dans un élément) qui donne sa force à ce haïku.

Keywords

rain smell cooking

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

Archetypes and dialectics

* T_Immobile - Frozen Time.

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