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Analysis of the Haiku structure

sunlight
on grandfather’s whiskers
we close the lid

lumière du jour
sur les moustaches de grand-père
nous fermons le couvercle


John Hawkhead, UK
cco 2018-11-2

Commentaire.

Haïku très dur, à la fin inattendue et déstabilisante. A remarquer l'effet d'extinction de la Lumière, au propre comme au figuré dans la structure du haïku.

Keywords

light death

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* absence - The main element is not explicit.
The haiku is structured around an unnamed element to which each image refers. The interest is to save the space that would be used by naming the element while having the effect it produces.

The haiku can appear as a vault from which the scaffolding has been removed. If the haiku is well composed, the main element is absent but everything refers to it.

This technique delays storage in memory because the reader must complete the discourse with the unnamed element so that the haiku is unambiguously understandable. It then acquires a higher memory weight.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* dur - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* soudain - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Lumière - The Light.

La Lumière.
A mettre en relation avec la Lumière dans la Nuit.

* A_Mort - Death.

Contexte de mort (deuil, décès, cimetière...) ou pulsion de mort (guerre, violence...).

* T_Transition - Transition in Time between two states.

- Le moment où la situation passe d'un état à un autre ou va le faire.
- C'est aussi le moment "juste avant". (A vérifier car il faut le différencier du T_FuturPresent) Ici, c'est un futur certain et immédiat (comme en chinois).

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