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coups de klaxons -
un vol d'oies au-dessus
de la voie rapide


Damien Gabriels, France
cco 2018-11-2

Commentaire.

Un haïku basé sur un motif assez fréquent de l'opposition entre le Sauvage (toujours des oiseaux, symbôle de liberté) et notre monde artificiel, encagé. Ce motif apparaît quelque soit l'endroit du monde. Il doit correspondre à une aspiration profonde d'un monde moins contraint, plus naturel. Donc, ici, un discours engagé au niveau profond de lecture, recouvert en surface par une observation. Discours feuilleté, peut-être implicite pour l'auteur.

Keywords

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Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm092 -

Used techniques :

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* soudain - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

* - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Voyage - The Travel.

Le voyage, la migration... Lié à la Route qui elle est plus en potentialités que le Voyage qui est action.

* D_Nature - The Travel.

Le voyage, la migration... Lié à la Route qui elle est plus en potentialités que le Voyage qui est action.

* D_HautBas - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

* T_Mince - A very thin slice of Time.

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