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subway transfer
the homeless lady
sells mirrors

couloir de metro
la sans -abri
vend des miroirs

Nicholas David Klacsanzky , Ukraine
cco 2018-08-1


Un espace anonyme, une anonyme, juste entrevue. Et dans ses miroirs, nous. Il y a là pour moi quelque chose de profond dans cette observation objective d'une situation banale. Un grand haïku naît ainsi, parce que l'Inconscient a perçu, ce que nous avons simplement vu. Ce haïku est aussi l'exemple même qu'un haïku engagé se cache parfois dans une simple observation. Il faut alors, comme ici, que le haïku précède le message. A bien retenir : ne jamais vouloir dire mais laisser venir et bien noter les images.


metro urban homeless poverty mirror

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm074 -

Used techniques :

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

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* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Rencontre - The Unexpected Encounter.

La rencontre fortuite entre deux êtres avec un moment où quelque chose se passe entre eux.

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