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Analysis of the Haiku structure

thumbing through
an old rolodex
winter light

je feuillète
un vieux rolodex
jour d'hiver


Debbi Antebi, UK
cco 2018-12-1

Commentaire.

Haïku de même facture que celui avec le scrabble. Ici, c'est plutôt une plongée dans le passé, avec en miroir possible une reflexion sur ce que fut ce passé. L'auteure découvre au fil des cartes de cet antique objet de bureau, tout un monde oublié, révolu. La note hivernale, par sa lumière (le jour) faible, apporte une connotation de lenteur, de temps figé; un peu comme un film en noir et blanc. La force de ce haïku réside aussi dans le sabi, le charme des choses qui ont vécu. A noter que la version originale anglaise, par la diminution des longueurs des éléments, ralentit le rythme et mime l'atmosphère de recueillement du discours.

Keywords

winter light

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* sabi - Sabi
The sabi is a concept of Japanese aesthetics, derived from Zen Buddhist concepts, linked to the feeling created by the alteration by time, the decrepitude of aging things, the patina of objects, the mark of Time. The charm of things that have lived (Vintage des Américains).

Are sabi: Used steps from an old staircase, worn clothing, a rusty railing, a patinated knob...

In connection with Sabi-wabi.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Japanese_aesthetics

* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

* association - Associations.
Images in association. Interaction comes from the sharing of only a part of the semes. There are no similarities or oppositions that create a dynamic. However, the relationship is stronger than in the juxtaposition that places images side by side without semantic relationships between them.

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

* - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

Archetypes and dialectics

* T_PassePresent - Bubble of Past.

* - Bubble of Past.

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