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long-distance mom . . .
the messages of rain


Nicholas David Klacsanzky , Ukraine
cco 2018-12-1

Ce haïku me rappelle un très court poème anglais (Westron Wynde) d'un auteur anonyme du 16ème siècle ( où l'auteur était séparé de son amour par des rues de pluie et de vent. Ici, l'auteur illustre la séparation par un espace de pluie, une notation de type meteo, qui d'ailleurs sert de contexte affectif comme sensoriel (froideur, inconfort...). Cette technique est très utilisée dans la poésie et la chanson d'amours séparées. Plus d'info : https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Westron_Wynde

Keywords

phone rain family mother

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss021 Life in the distance.
  Motif : mmm037 - Voice in the distance in the phone, weather.

Used techniques :

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* ellipse - Ellipsis.
Ellipsis: Only the minimum is said but the whole situation can be reconstruct by the reader.

* L2 - Two lines haikus.
Two lines haiku.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Separation - Separation, Parting, Farewells.

Le fait de se séparer pour un long moment. De ne plus se revoir avant longtemps. De ne pas savoir si on se reverra. Souvent lié au thème de la Mort. D'ailleurs, ne dit-on pas, partir, c'est mourir un peu.

* A_Absence - Absence of someone or something..

* - Absence of someone or something..

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