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Analysis of the Haiku structure

tide pools
a plastic bottle full
of sea water

flaques de marée
une bouteille en plastique pleine
d'eau de mer


Garry Eaton, Canada
cco 2019-01-2

Commentaire.

Opposition-similitude entre les flaques de marée et le contenu de la bouteille. Opposition entre naturel versus artificiel, entre grand versus petit, entre eau libre et eau captive, entre l'éphémère des flaques et de l'eau prisonnière du plastique. Similitude des petites étendues d'eau. en résonance avec la mer. Ce haïku trouve aussi sa force par une résonance avec le problème du plastique dispersé dans les mers. Ce thème sous-jacent, non-dit explicitement, renforce le discours de surface.

Keywords

sea beach plastic bottle

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* opp-sim - Opposition-similarity.
Opposition AND similarity. A relationship between two terms is both an opposition and a similarity.

For example: an egg on the plate and the setting sun. There is a sharing of the semes of roundness, red, but opposition between Up versus Bottom, Large versus Small.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

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* - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

Translated with www.DeepL.com/Translator

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Rencontre - The Unexpected Encounter.

La rencontre fortuite entre deux êtres avec un moment où quelque chose se passe entre eux.

* D_Sauvage - Domesticated <> Wild.

* D_HautBas - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

* D_GrandPetit - Big <> Little.

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.

* T_Mince - A very thin slice of Time.

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