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Entre deux averses
sur le trottoir d'en face
l'odeur du pain chaud


Evelyne Bélard, France
cco 2019-01-2

Commentaire.

Un haïku reposant sur l'opposition entre météo froide ou à tout le moins adverse, et une nourriture chaude. Un schèma assez répandu. Ce haïku parle plutôt de la nourriture par son odeur, une manière subtile et riche de la convoquer dans le discours. L'odeur du pain chaud dans la pluie ou la boue est irrésistible. Elle est la Vie dans le désastre ou l'adversité.

Keywords

rain smell street bread

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm003 -

Used techniques :

* inversion - Inversion of sentence order.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* meteo - Meteo used to create an atmosphere.
Use in a haiku segment of a reference to the weather (weather conditions) that provides more than just the mention of the weather as a background. The reference refers to a state of weather that has physical (cold rain, sudden hail, frost,...) or psychological (overcast sky, storm warning, sultry afternoon...) effects. These effects are mainly felt through the skin (contact, temperature,...); which connects the author/reader to the World (his direct environment).

The mentioned weather and its effects share a set of semes (brutality, unpredictability, "cold", psychologically oppressive climate,...) with the situation experienced by the author.

A sudden and unpleasant change of situation shares semes (brutality, unpredictability, impact) with a sudden storm, hail, cold rain. A hard time to live, a disappointment, with a cold rain. An overcast weather before the rain shares with a moment when we fear the occurrence of events that we fear.

Although the meteo is often used as a marker (kigo - word of season), it sometimes brings more than just the place in the season or the context of the moment.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_ChaudFroid - Warm <> Cold.

* T_Lent - Slow Time.

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