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aube d'hiver -
l'écume de mon café
crépite doucement


Damien Gabriels, France
cco 2019-02-1

Commentaire.

La force de ce haïku me semble reposer sur une attention particulière aux petits bruits et donc, par là, à l’épaisseur du silence. On en viendrait à oublier les oppositions Inrérieur versus Extérieur, Chaud versus Froid, et l’archétype de l’Abri. A noter aussi, le caractère éphémère du phénomène, lui-même infime. Petite joie, grand effet. Comme disent les anglophones : That makes my day ! Et ce haïku aussi pour moi.

Keywords

dawn coffee cup sound winter

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm003 -

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm040 -

Used techniques :

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.

* D_ClairSombre - Light <> Darkness.

* D_ChaudFroid - Warm <> Cold.

* D_GrandPetit - Big <> Little.

* T_Lent - Slow Time.

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