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Analysis of the Haiku structure

subway to work
the scent of meditation
on my sweater

metro vers le travail
l’odeur de la méditation
sur mon pull


Nicholas David Klacsanzky , Ukraine
cco 2019-02-2

Commentaire.

J'aime bien cette juxtaposition improbable d'éléments, ainsi que leurs oppositions : odeur versus méditation, méditation versus travail, odeur, méditation versus matérialité. Il reste aussi un peu de mystère : quelle est donc l'odeur de la méditation ? Une question qui évite un rangement trop rapide lors de la phase de liage en mémoire.

Keywords

metro scent zen humour sweat

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

* glissement - Shifting from one meaning to another.
Shift of discourse from one meaning to another. It's the whole discourse that changes meaning. Not to be confused with the surprise, which is an unexpected element that does not deeply change the meaning of the discourse.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

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