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Analysis of the Haiku structure

heat lightning—
the first drop of sweat
on her chin

éclair de chaleur —
la première goutte de sueur
sur son menton


John Wisdom, USA
cco 2019-02-2

Commentaire.

Court-metrage. L'auteur pose un minimum d'éléments en les juxtaposant et fait naître le besion d'une prolongation pour constituer un discours qui satisfait notre curiosité. Ici, le début de discours s'ouvre à plusieurs possibles, laissés à la liberté du lecteur. On a plusieurs alors discours superficiels prolongeant celui énoncé par l'auteur. On remarquera une ambiguïté sur le caractère érotique du discours. Ce qui en fait le charme, l'activité en phase de liage et donc, la puissance.

Keywords

lightning thunderstorm woman erotic hot

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* court-metrage - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* lectures - Multiple readings. Several possible meanings.
Haiku has several possible meanings but always at the surface level. It is not a question of a layered discourse where the meaning of surface and deep differs. Not to be confused with layered discourse with a surface discourse and one or more deep discourses.

* meteo - Meteo used to create an atmosphere.
Use in a haiku segment of a reference to the weather (weather conditions) that provides more than just the mention of the weather as a background. The reference refers to a state of weather that has physical (cold rain, sudden hail, frost,...) or psychological (overcast sky, storm warning, sultry afternoon...) effects. These effects are mainly felt through the skin (contact, temperature,...); which connects the author/reader to the World (his direct environment).

The mentioned weather and its effects share a set of semes (brutality, unpredictability, "cold", psychologically oppressive climate,...) with the situation experienced by the author.

A sudden and unpleasant change of situation shares semes (brutality, unpredictability, impact) with a sudden storm, hail, cold rain. A hard time to live, a disappointment, with a cold rain. An overcast weather before the rain shares with a moment when we fear the occurrence of events that we fear.

Although the meteo is often used as a marker (kigo - word of season), it sometimes brings more than just the place in the season or the context of the moment.

Archetypes and dialectics

* T_Transition - Transition in Time between two states.

- Le moment où la situation passe d'un état à un autre ou va le faire.
- C'est aussi le moment "juste avant". (A vérifier car il faut le différencier du T_FuturPresent) Ici, c'est un futur certain et immédiat (comme en chinois).

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