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Valentine's Day
a stock girl takes home
the petal-less orchid

Saint-Valentin
une magasinière ramène chez elle
l'orchidée sans pétales


Julie Warther, USA
cco 2019-02-2

Commentaire.

La force de ce haïku repose sur la difficulté de préciser exactement le sens du discours. Plusieurs lectures existent donc au niveau superficiel. Plusieurs questions se posent donc et cela crée de l'activité lors de la phase de liage en mémoire. Qu'est-ce qui est important ? Est-ce le lien entre Saint-Valentin et fleur abîmée, celui entre l'ouvrière à la tâche ingrate et la fleur abîmée, la fleur abîmée qui est sauvée ? Cette ambiguïté doit être levée et une décision prise lors du rangement en mémoire. L'activité nécessaire va donner sa force au discours.

Keywords

Valentine flower woman

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* lectures - Multiple readings. Several possible meanings.
Haiku has several possible meanings but always at the surface level. It is not a question of a layered discourse where the meaning of surface and deep differs. Not to be confused with layered discourse with a surface discourse and one or more deep discourses.

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

Translated with www.DeepL.com/Translator

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Fragilité - Fragility, tenuousness.

Quelque chose de fragile dans un univers "hostile". Qui emporte en lui quelque chose.

David, le petit être.

* A_Reveil - The Awakening, Reliving.

Quelque chose s'éveille, qui était "endormi". Qui renait après une période d'absence. Il se signale.

* D_VieMort - Life <> Death.

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