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Analysis of the Haiku structure

unkind words
the sudden tightening
of mussel shells

paroles désobligeantes
la fermeture soudaine
des coquilles de moules


Lucy Whitehead , UK
cco 2019-02-2

Commentaire.

Voici un haïku avec une rupture de discours au niveau superficiel et une continuïté profonde. L'auteure décrit ses sentiments, non pas explicitement, ce qui n'en ferait pas un haïku , mais utilise un discours objectif de substitution partageant la partie importante des sèmes du commencement du discours. Une technique classique sur laquelle repose le tanka.

Keywords

shell

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* tanka - Tanka-like haiku.
Tanka is composed of two segments. The first, objective, describes a situation, the second, subjective, allows the author's feelings to speak. It is possible to use this structure in haiku.

The second segment can, however, be written without the author explicitly talking about himself but simply placing elements of his/her behaviour in it.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-trait - Style,subject handling


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* soudain - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* concordance - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* trans_S - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures

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