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Analysis of the Haiku structure

salle de bain -
dehors et dedans
brume de printemps


Damien Gabriels, France
cco 2019-04-1

Commentaire.

Faire attention, vivre le détail insignifiant, ou comment ne pas s'ennuyer et avoir une vie riche. Mais c'est surtout la mise en rapport entre les deux brumes qui, par son dynamisme, donne de l'activité à ce haïku. A noter aussi l'opposition Intérieur versus Extérieur et le lien de similitude possible entre printemps et début de journée.

Keywords

morning window haze spring steam bathroom

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* inversion - Inversion of sentence order.

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.

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