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Analysis of the Haiku structure

cabanon de vignes~
le rouge
d'un graffiti


Annie Chassing, France
cco 2019-05-1

Commentaire.

Plusieurs dispositifs intéressants dans ce haïku. Le premier, en L2, est un changement de sémantique de 'rouge', qui passe d'une allusion au vin à une couleur d'inscription. Ce glissement de sens est assez rare, et mérite d'être étudié pour son efficacité. Le second est un archetype de la Vie (la couleur vive) sur un bâtiment généralement peu moderne. Une affirmation de la Vie. Le troisième est la juxtaposition peu attendue des trois éléments (cabanon, rouge, graffiti). Un beau haïku minimaliste mais efficace. Ce n'est pas un "so-what" (haïku vide et inactif) malgré son minimalisme. C'est justement celui-ci qui crée son activité dans l'esprit du lecteur/trice.

Keywords

color red graffiti wine

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm053 -

Used techniques :

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* glissement - Shifting from one meaning to another.
Shift of discourse from one meaning to another. It's the whole discourse that changes meaning. Not to be confused with the surprise, which is an unexpected element that does not deeply change the meaning of the discourse.

* pivot - Pivotal element.
Use of a pivot element as a link between two different parts of the haiku. This element belongs to both parts.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* absence - The main element is not explicit.
The haiku is structured around an unnamed element to which each image refers. The interest is to save the space that would be used by naming the element while having the effect it produces.

The haiku can appear as a vault from which the scaffolding has been removed. If the haiku is well composed, the main element is absent but everything refers to it.

This technique delays storage in memory because the reader must complete the discourse with the unnamed element so that the haiku is unambiguously understandable. It then acquires a higher memory weight.

* courtmetrage - Short clip.
A haiku that could be a video clip. The initial sequence of a short film.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_PointActif - Active point (color, sound, ...)

Variante de la Couleur. Ici, c'est un point, généralement de couleur qui a le rôle important. En fait, cet archétype illustre le fait que c'est l'Inconscient qui analyse les images de notre regard. C'est lui qui repère ces points et y dirige notre regard.

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