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Analysis of the Haiku structure

crépuscule
les piaillements inquiets
de la merlette


Gérard Dumon, France
cco 2019-05-1

Commentaire.

Tous les éléments concourrent à créer l'atmosphère du discours. Voici un haïku qui en dit plus dans l'esprit du lecteur que ce que l'auteur n'a exprimé. Un bel effet d'économie de moyens à étudier. Ce haïku possède aussi un configuration de court-metrage; il pourrait être le début d'une histoire. Une technique qui crée de l'activité après la lecture et non pendant celle-ci.

Keywords

dusk cry bird

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

Translated with www.DeepL.com/Translator

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

* avant - Just before.
We're just before something happens. The haiku notes the moment before the situation changes from one state to another. Like, for example, just before the rain.

* union - Union between author and subject.
A link, union, between the author and a being, animal or thing. Empathy.

* courtmetrage - Short clip.
A haiku that could be a video clip. The initial sequence of a short film.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Menace - The Threat.

Le sentiment qu'il y a une menace latente. Quelque chose d'indéfinissable.

* A_Nuit - The Night.

La nuit primale, avec son obscurité, ses "dangers", ses mystères et nos peurs millénaires.

* A_Rencontre - The Unexpected Encounter.

La rencontre fortuite entre deux êtres avec un moment où quelque chose se passe entre eux.

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