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Analysis of the Haiku structure

ليلة بلا نجوم -
‎في علبة البن
‎نملة مصابة بالأرق

nuit sans étoiles ~
dans une boîte à café
une fourmi souffre d'insomnie


Meryem Lahlou, Maroc
cco 2019-05-1

Commentaire.

Haïku dont l'activité repose sur la juxtaposition inattendue d'éléments, tous liés à la noirceur. J'ame bien L3 malgré qu'il soit un avis de l'auteure. Il apporte quelque chose d'indéfinissable de plus. On pourrait aussi y voir une projection de l'auteure qui passe une mauvaise nuit et rôde dans la cuisine. On aurait alors un discours feuilleté. Deux discours différents, au niveau superficiel (fourmi), et profond (insomnie).

Keywords

night coffe ant color black insomnia

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* union - Union between author and subject.
A link, union, between the author and a being, animal or thing. Empathy.

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Nuit - The Night.

La nuit primale, avec son obscurité, ses "dangers", ses mystères et nos peurs millénaires.

* A_Clos - The enclosed place.

Un endroit clos, entouré d'une frontière (murs par exemple), renfermé, non accessible. Il n'a pas la fonction protectrice de l'Abri.

Etre au chaud sans une maison alors qu'il pleut dehors est relié à l'Abri plutôt qu'au lieu Clos.

* A_Rencontre - The Unexpected Encounter.

La rencontre fortuite entre deux êtres avec un moment où quelque chose se passe entre eux.

* D_Nature - The Unexpected Encounter.

La rencontre fortuite entre deux êtres avec un moment où quelque chose se passe entre eux.

* T_Immobile - Frozen Time.

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