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Analysis of the Haiku structure

closing time
empty bottles
empty faces

heure de fermeture
bouteilles vides
visages vides


Bryan Rickert, USA
cco 2019-05-1

Commentaire.

J'aime bien ces haïkus basés sur la juxtaposition. Celui-ci cependant n'est pas "une liste de commission (grocery list). Il mime la situation par sa disposition et le silence qu'il contient. Haïku tragique merveilleusement rendu par la composition.

Keywords

bar alcool silence night

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

* avant - Just before.
We're just before something happens. The haiku notes the moment before the situation changes from one state to another. Like, for example, just before the rain.

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* S3 - Three elements haiku.
Three independent elements compose the haiku. Also known as the grocery list.

* dur - Three elements haiku.
Three independent elements compose the haiku. Also known as the grocery list.

* - Three elements haiku.
Three independent elements compose the haiku. Also known as the grocery list.

Archetypes and dialectics

* T_Transition - Transition in Time between two states.

- Le moment où la situation passe d'un état à un autre ou va le faire.
- C'est aussi le moment "juste avant". (A vérifier car il faut le différencier du T_FuturPresent) Ici, c'est un futur certain et immédiat (comme en chinois).

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