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Analysis of the Haiku structure

flower moon --
last stop
of the bachelorette party

(lune des fleurs --
dernier arrêt
de l'enterrement de vie de jeune fille)


Paul David Mena, USA
cco 2019-05-2

Commentaire.

Tout en allusions, ce discours elliptique est basé sur la juxtaposition d'éléments ayant par ailleurs des éléments sémantiques communs (fleur, virginité, nouvelle vie...). Les liens sont cependant ténus mais bien présents.

Keywords

flower moon woman wedding

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* ellipse - Ellipsis.
Ellipsis: Only the minimum is said but the whole situation can be reconstruct by the reader.
This is also the case when only a part of the discourse is present. The remaining part can be guessed by the reader.

* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* concordance - Accordance between the surface and deep discourses
Accordance between superfical and deep discourses. Two parallel discourses.

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

Translated with www.DeepL.com/Translator

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Passage - The Crossing, the Transition.

Tout ce qui est le passage d'une étape, d'une borne, d'un état à l'autre. Le franchissement d'un col, le passage d'une barrière séparant deux zones. Les ponts, solstices, nouvel-an...

* D_HautBas - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

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