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ignoring the caution light
a pair of red-tailed hawks


Paul David Mena, USA
cco 2019-05-2

Commentaire.

Haïku basé sur un thème fréquent. L'opposition entre les oiseaux (archétype du Libre, du Sauvage) et notre vie dans un monde artificiel. Les arrêts forcés sur la route (embouteillages ou feux de signalisation) sont une occasion où cette opposition affleure. A noter aussi, l'opposition Haut versus Bas et le sème de la couleur vive en commun.

Keywords

road accident police light bird color red

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* S1 - Folded sentence.
Haiku in one folded sentence.

* L2 - Two lines haikus.
Two lines haiku.

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_HautBas - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

* D_Nature - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

* T_Immobile - Frozen Time.

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