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Analysis of the Haiku structure

fin d'après-midi -
le grincement de la balançoire
ralentit


Damien Gabriels, France
cco 2019-06-1

Commentaire.

Un bel exemple de notation du temps. Ici, un fragment qui a attiré l’attention de l’auteur. A noter la similitude entre la fin de la journée et le ralentissement d’un jeu qui contient de manière implicite la fin du jeu. Un exemple aussi du Futur (fin du jour) contenu dans le Présent (fin d’après-midi). J’y trouve comme une légère inquiétude de cette fin du jour . Un sentiment qui nous vient de très loin (mémoire phyllogénique?).

Keywords

afternoon sound noise garden child

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

* - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Temps - Time.

* T_Lent - Slow Time.

* T_FuturPresent - Bubble of Future.

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