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Analysis of the Haiku structure

regard brûlant —
dans son éventail l'air chaud
du flamenco

Bernard Dato, France
cco 2019-07-2


On dira que ce n'est pas un haïku à cause de L1 (figure). Il en a cependant beaucoup de traits. La référence saisonnière, la concision, le sens et la force du détail. J'ajoute aussi l'originalité, la construction faisant une lien entre L1 et L3 au travers de la connaissance du lecteur. A remarquer le lien sur le thème de la chaleur entre deux plans (abstrait en L1, concret en L2).


humour dance woman

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* jeu_mots - Puns.
A pun, a double meaning word without being a pivot. This is often an occasion for a multi-level reading discourse with double meaning words. This device is linked to humour, to the comic of the situation.

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* ellipse - Ellipsis.
Ellipsis: Only the minimum is said but the whole situation can be reconstruct by the reader.
This is also the case when only a part of the discourse is present. The remaining part can be guessed by the reader.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

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