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Analysis of the Haiku structure

Café de l'aube -
le bruit de la cuillère
sur le carrelage


Sandrine Waronski, France
cco 2019-07-2

Commentaire.

J'aime bien les haïkus de café. Ils ont toujours une atmosphère spéciale. Le café est un élément aux connotations très riches et complexes. Ce haïku marque un contraste entre deux temps. Le temps lent de l'aube et cleui bref, éphémère de la chute sur le carrelage. On a aussi une impression de perturbation du silence (non dit). Un instant bref qui résonne longtemps.

Keywords

coffee dawn morning sound

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* ellipse - Ellipsis.
Ellipsis: Only the minimum is said but the whole situation can be reconstruct by the reader.
This is also the case when only a part of the discourse is present. The remaining part can be guessed by the reader.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* soudain - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

* - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

Archetypes and dialectics

* T_Mince - A very thin slice of Time.

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