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Analysis of the Haiku structure

summer picnic
my daughter's shadow
wearing daisies

pique-nique estival
l'ombre de ma fille
habillée de marguerites

Grace Galton, UK
cco 2019-07-2


J'aime bien la lenteur de ce haïku. Il y a quelque chose de spécial avec cette ombre vêtue de fleurs. Peut-être l'archetype de l'autonomie de l'Ombre, un sujet mystérieux toujours actif dans notre Imaginaire. IL y a aussi une similitude entre la jeune fille et les fleurs.


summer child shadow flower

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Ombre - The Shadow plays an active part.

* T_Immobile - Frozen Time.

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