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Analysis of the Haiku structure

before we crest
the sand dune’s tip
the question …

avant que nous ne passions
la crête de la dune de sable
la question ....


Maggie Kennedy, USA
cco 2019-07-2

Commentaire.

Haïku en une phrase repliée mais deux sections. Il tire sa force dans son inachèvement qui force le lecteur à le complèter en mémoire court-terme avant de le ranger. Il perturbe par l'indécision qu'il crée et c'est cette activité qui lui donne de la résonnance, de la profondeur. On est là, à une Frontière. On sent qu'il y aura un avant et un après.

Keywords

dune beach couple sand

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* courtmetrage - Short clip.
A haiku that could be a video clip. The initial sequence of a short film.

Effects: resmem - Resonance in memory.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* psycho - Haiku with a psychological background.
Haiku can have a reading level that expresses an underlying psychological situation that is still active. It is not sure if this analysis is accurate. It can simply exist in the reader's mind. It is almost always absent from the author's intention, as can be seen from the author's request for information.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-vecu - Personal(Experienced, psycho, acquired...)


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* soudain - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* S1 - Folded sentence.
Haiku in one folded sentence.

Effects: decod - Decoding the structure.
Affects the time required to understand the speech by the time required to decode the structure. Groups the elements by physical and temporal caesuras.

At the level: 0-form - Formal level
Formal appearance, written forms.

Description level: 1-pres - Formal representation

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