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night drizzle
puddles fill with streetlights
instead of stars

bruine nocturne
les flaques se remplissent des lampes de la rue
au lieu d'étoiles


Catherine, USA
cco 2019-07-2

Commentaire.

Haïku basé sur le schéma du ciel (ici le motif des étoiles) dans les flaques. A noter le rôle de la Lumière qui fait penser à des lucioles et les oppositions Haut versus Bas, Grand versus Petit, Nature versus Construit.

Keywords

night drizzle star light street

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm065 -

Used techniques :

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* opp-sim - Opposition-similarity.
Opposition AND similarity. A relationship between two terms is both an opposition and a similarity.

For example: an egg on the plate and the setting sun. There is a sharing of the semes of roundness, red, but opposition between Up versus Bottom, Large versus Small.

* atmopshere - Opposition-similarity.
Opposition AND similarity. A relationship between two terms is both an opposition and a similarity.

For example: an egg on the plate and the setting sun. There is a sharing of the semes of roundness, red, but opposition between Up versus Bottom, Large versus Small.

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_HautBas - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

* D_GrandPetit - Big <> Little.

* D_Nature - Big <> Little.

* T_Immobile - Frozen Time.

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