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Analysis of the Haiku structure

a pebble
sinks into its silence
river dusk

un caillou
coule dans son silence
crépuscule du fleuve


Caroline Skanne, USA
cco 2019-08-1

Commentaire.

Haïku de noirceur et de silence, porté par des archetypes majeurs de Chute, d'Engloutissement, de Chose Enfouie. Il y a une liaison entre le caillou qui coule et le jour qui sombre. Bientôt, on ne verra plus rien.

Keywords

stone river silence dusk evening

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

* soudain - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Chute - The Fall,the Decline,to die,to grow old.

Tout ce qui est considéré comme une diminution de l'état, une perte de niveau, généralement suite au cours du Temps. Le déclin des êtres ou des choses.

Instanciations
- La maison abandonnée, la vieillesse, la maladie.
- L'approche de la mort, de la fin.
- La dégradation des lieux, des objets.
- Le déclin.
- Parfois toute situation sabi portant la trace des années sur un objet.

Type : Etat

Structure : Sujet + Verbe + Etat

Sujet := Toute chose
Verbe := être / devenir
Etat := abandonné / inutile / dégradé /diminué

* A_Nuit - The Night.

La nuit primale, avec son obscurité, ses "dangers", ses mystères et nos peurs millénaires.

* T_Mince - A very thin slice of Time.

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