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morning coffee -
familiar pleasure
in each other's eye

café du matin -
plaisir familier
dans les yeux l'un de l'autre


Carol Raisfeld, USA
cco 2019-08-1

Commentaire.

Ce haïku est une variante du motif 'Chacun regarde l'autre'. Mais le café, avec toute sa richesse de sensations, lui donne un contexte actif intense.

Keywords

coffee morning eyes love pleasure

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss020 The Encounter.
  Motif : mmm007 - Everyone looks at the other.

Schéma : sss011 Food - Mood
  Motif : mmm054 - Food - Mood

Used techniques :


* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-aut - Author's role


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content

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