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Analysis of the Haiku structure

evening train
going the same way
as the sun

train du soir
allant dans la même direction
que le soleil


Beth, USA
cco 2019-08-1

Commentaire.

Haïku porte par l'archetype du Voyage matérialisé ici par le train, généralement à longue distance aux USA, et le soleil. L'Espace y joue un rôle important. L'auteur semble y dire son désir de partir alors que lui reste là, où la Nuit va venir (soir). On pourrait aussi y voir le schéma du train de nuit, connu en France par un succès de Richard Anthony.

Keywords

evening train road sunset

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Espace - The Space.

* A_Voyage - The Travel.

Le voyage, la migration... Lié à la Route qui elle est plus en potentialités que le Voyage qui est action.

* A_Nuit - The Night.

La nuit primale, avec son obscurité, ses "dangers", ses mystères et nos peurs millénaires.

* - The Night.

La nuit primale, avec son obscurité, ses "dangers", ses mystères et nos peurs millénaires.

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