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Analysis of the Haiku structure

full moon
the wind howls through our clothes
and the crushed grass

pleine lune
le vent souffle à travers nos vêtements
et l'herbe écrasée


Catherine, USA
cco 2019-08-1

Commentaire.

Etrange haïku, peut-être tout en ellipse.. Parle-t-il d'une promenade ou de tout autre chose. L1 en serait un indice. Dans tous les cas, il laisse toute liberté au lecteur; ce qui donne au haïku une grande force dûe aux réinterprétations multiples finales avant un rangement en mémoire.

Keywords

full_moon moon grass couple clothes

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* courtmetrage - Short clip.
A haiku that could be a video clip. The initial sequence of a short film.

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* ellipse - Ellipsis.
Ellipsis: Only the minimum is said but the whole situation can be reconstruct by the reader.
This is also the case when only a part of the discourse is present. The remaining part can be guessed by the reader.

* absence - The main element is not explicit.
The haiku is structured around an unnamed element to which each image refers. The interest is to save the space that would be used by naming the element while having the effect it produces.

The haiku can appear as a vault from which the scaffolding has been removed. If the haiku is well composed, the main element is absent but everything refers to it.

This technique delays storage in memory because the reader must complete the discourse with the unnamed element so that the haiku is unambiguously understandable. It then acquires a higher memory weight.

* - The main element is not explicit.
The haiku is structured around an unnamed element to which each image refers. The interest is to save the space that would be used by naming the element while having the effect it produces.

The haiku can appear as a vault from which the scaffolding has been removed. If the haiku is well composed, the main element is absent but everything refers to it.

This technique delays storage in memory because the reader must complete the discourse with the unnamed element so that the haiku is unambiguously understandable. It then acquires a higher memory weight.

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