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Bernard Dato, France
cco 2019-08-2

Commentaire.

Ce haïku est basé sur une juxtaposition improbable entre nuages et chromes de voiture. Une technique qui, lorsqu'elle est réussie comme ici, donne de la force au discours. Il est aussi basé sur des oppositions actives (Haut versus Bas, Grand versus Petit, Dur versus aérien). On pourrait y trouver aussi une opposition plus subtile entre la chaleur et l'impression visuelle de froid du chromé. J'aime bien aussi l'étrangeté en L3 : les nuages à l'étroit. Comme si le Monde était contenu dans un élément de cette ancienne auto. Il a l'oeil, lauteur, pour nous avoir écrit cela...

Keywords

heat cloud car

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss018 The Sky on Earth.
  Motif : mmm076 - The sky in the container.

Used techniques :


* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-aut - Author's role


* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Miniature - The Miniature.


* D_Nature - Nature versus Domesticated.


* D_HautBas - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

* D_LourdLeger - Opposition between hard, heavy versus light, airy.


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