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Analysis of the Haiku structure

marée très très haute-
moi aussi je marche
sur l'eau….


Francine Aubry, France
cco 2019-09-1

Commentaire.

Etrange haïku qui pourrait être lu de plusieurs manières. Le discours peut être concret : une promenade sur la plage avec le motif du ciel dans la flaque (ici la mer). Il peut aussi parler de manière imagée et abstraite du plaisir amoureux, voire, physique. Cete technique d'ambiguïté due aux lectures parallèles au niveau superficiel est à méditer par l'effet qu'elle provoque lors de la phase de compréhension du discours.

Keywords

tide sea beach water

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss018 The Sky on Earth.
  Motif : mmm033 - Walk on the sky.

Schéma : sss040 Me and the World.
  Motif : mmm079 - Me and the World.

Used techniques :


* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-aut - Author's role


* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

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Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-trait - Style,subject handling


* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* lectures - Multiple readings. Several possible meanings.
Haiku has several possible meanings but always at the surface level. It is not a question of a layered discourse where the meaning of surface and deep differs. Not to be confused with layered discourse with a surface discourse and one or more deep discourses.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_MoiMonde - I versus the World

Mention d'un être qui se dstincte par rapport au reste du Monde.

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