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Analysis of the Haiku structure

weet  -
in seelent causeys
the scrinchin o snails

rain  -
in silent streets
the crunching of snails

pluie -
dans les rues silencieuses
l'écrasement des escargots


John McDonald, Scotland (UK)
cco 2019-09-1

Commentaire.

Qui n'a pas en mémoire ce drame total de l'écrasement d'un coquille d'escargot ? Un petit animal pour lequel nous avons souvent de la compassion. Ici, le bruit faible atteint un niveau important accentué par le silence (au niveau superficiel du discours) et le drame ressenti (au niveau profond). A noter aussi, la technique minimaliste laissant le discours extérieur à l'auteur.

Keywords

snal rain noise death

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)


* ellipse - Ellipsis.
Ellipsis: Only the minimum is said but the whole situation can be reconstruct by the reader.
This is also the case when only a part of the discourse is present. The remaining part can be guessed by the reader.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Mort - Death.

Contexte de mort (deuil, décès, cimetière...) ou pulsion de mort (guerre, violence...).

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