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Analysis of the Haiku structure

waking up
with freckles & curls
summer break

s'éveiller
avec des taches de rousseur et des boucles
pause estivale


Debbi Antebi, UK
cco 2019-09-1

Commentaire.

Partage de sèmes entre été et rousseur des taches. Je trouve la construction avec le contexte en fin plus active que s'il était au début. L'idée est que cela suscite un questionnement durant la lecture et force à une réinterprétation lorsque le lecteur arrive à la fin. Au contraire, lorsque le contexte est placé au début, la suite apparait comme une explication; ce qui est toujours désagréable en haïku. A remarquer, la technique d'association des deux parties (L1L2 et L3) mais avec peu de partage de sèmes, ce qui pourrait passer pour une juxtaposition.

Keywords

woman summer skin hair

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* psycho - Haiku with a psychological background.
Haiku can have a reading level that expresses an underlying psychological situation that is still active. It is not sure if this analysis is accurate. It can simply exist in the reader's mind. It is almost always absent from the author's intention, as can be seen from the author's request for information.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-vecu - Personal(Experienced, psycho, acquired...)


* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

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Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-trait - Style,subject handling


* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)


* association - Associations.
Images in association. Interaction comes from the sharing of only a part of the semes. There are no similarities or oppositions that create a dynamic. However, the relationship is stronger than in the juxtaposition that places images side by side without semantic relationships between them.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Temps - Time.

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