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Analysis of the Haiku structure

premier thé -
la rumeur lointaine
d'une moto


Catherine Touzé-Ruiz, France
cco 2019-09-1

Commentaire.

La force de ce haïku réside dans le minimalisme de son discours. Tout en atmosphère, son activité repose sur un seul détail qui plante le décor. L'auteure a utilisé ici une technique de juxtaposition d'éléments sans relations (pas de sèmes communs). On peut considérer ce discours comme une ensemble (l'atmosphère) décrit à partir de deux détails suffisament parlants pour que le lecteur reconstitue la situation. Une technique très économe.

Keywords

morning tea cup noise sound motorcycle urban street

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss040 Me and the World.
  Motif : mmm079 - Me and the World.

Used techniques :


* ellipse - Ellipsis.
Ellipsis: Only the minimum is said but the whole situation can be reconstruct by the reader.
This is also the case when only a part of the discourse is present. The remaining part can be guessed by the reader.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_MoiMonde - I versus the World

Mention d'un être qui se dstincte par rapport au reste du Monde.

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