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Analysis of the Haiku structure

maison vendue--
une ombre dans le salon
soleil d'automne


Choupie Moysan, France
cco 2019-10-1

Commentaire.

Etrange haïku très ouvert quant à sa signification. Est-ce le nouvel occupant, est-ce un squatter ? Il est impossible de la dire. Cette technique laisse un grand rôle d'interprêtation au lecteur et renforce donc la pénétration du discours dans la mémoire par le travail d'évaluation avant rangement. A noter que contrairement à l'apparence graphique qui pose une pause en fin de L1, ce haïku est composé de trois segments. C'est la justesse de la juxtaposition des éléments qui lui donne sa force. Un style appelé parfois 'liste de commission', caractérisé par une économie d'espace.

Keywords

house shadow sun autumn

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss001 Overcoming Life.
  Motif : mmm038 - House elements that signal.

Used techniques :


* courtmetrage - Short clip.
A haiku that could be a video clip. The initial sequence of a short film.

Effects: resmem - Resonance in memory.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)


* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* soudain - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Ombre - The Shadow plays an active part.

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