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Analysis of the Haiku structure

midnight...
the steady rhythm
of her IV drip

minuit ...
le rythme régulier
de son intraveineuse


Grace Galton, UK
cco 2019-10-1

Commentaire.

Le Temps s'écoule lentement, goutte à goutte. Minuit est un cap à passer. Il est le vide du jour, le moment où celui-ci bascule. Verse comme disent les Chinois. La lenteur douloureuse est ici matérialisée par l'aiguille et la perfusion. Un art de dire sans dire explicitement, où le message est seulement entre les lignes. Une technique à étudier, surtout si vous avez quelque chose d'explicite à dire. Passez-le au au niveau profond et laissez le lecteur reconstituer le discours sous-jacent.

Keywords

midnight hospital illness

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Temps - Time.

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