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Analysis of the Haiku structure

high tide --
the smell of weed
by the docks

marée haute --
l'odeur d'herbe
sur les docks


Paul David Mena, USA
cco 2019-12-2

Commentaire.

Haïku basé sur un glissement de sens en L2. L'herbe a ici un double sens qui oblige à une relecture du discours et à réévaluer L1 (marée haute). Une technique poussée à l'extrême ici avec deux doubles sens.

Keywords

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Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* glissement - Shifting from one meaning to another.
Shift of discourse from one meaning to another. It's the whole discourse that changes meaning. Not to be confused with the surprise, which is an unexpected element that does not deeply change the meaning of the discourse.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* pivot - Pivotal element.
Use of a pivot element as a link between two different parts of the haiku. This element belongs to both parts.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-trait - Style,subject handling


* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

Translated with www.DeepL.com/Translator

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-trait - Style,subject handling


* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* lectures - Multiple readings. Several possible meanings.
Haiku has several possible meanings but always at the surface level. It is not a question of a layered discourse where the meaning of surface and deep differs. Not to be confused with layered discourse with a surface discourse and one or more deep discourses.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* jeu_mots - Puns.
A pun, a double meaning word without being a pivot. This is often an occasion for a multi-level reading discourse with double meaning words. This device is linked to humour, to the comic of the situation.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-vecu - Personal(Experienced, psycho, acquired...)

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