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image haiga

moving day
my shadow by the pond
one last time

jour de déménagement
mon ombre près de l'étang
une dernière fois


Sandi Pray, USA
cco 2019-12-2

Commentaire.

Haïku porté par l'archetype du Passage, du sens unique du Temps. Il y a eu l'avant, il y aura un après sans retour. Le haïku est là, dans cet instant éphémère où les choses basculent. A noter aussi le rôle actif de l'Ombre (un autre archétype) qui est venue et voudrait rester. L'auteure s'efface devant elle, devant cette présence si ténue qui la représente. On pourrait aussi y voir le rôle de l'Eau tranquille, une Image d' l'inconscient.

Keywords

moving pond shadow

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss030 Something continues.
  Motif : mmm091 - Something goes on after passing a milestone.

Used techniques :


* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-aut - Author's role

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Ombre - The Shadow plays an active part.

* A_ChoseActive - The Shadow plays an active part.

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