tempslibres - free times haiku database

Analysis of the Haiku structure

Sur la nappe tachée
on n’en finit plus de ramasser
des étoiles en plastique


Gérard Mathern, France
cco 2019-12-2

Commentaire.

J'aime bien la compacité de ce discours. En trois lignes, il nous dit tout d'une fin de soirée de fête. Le plus fort est qu'il ne s'agit pas formellement d'une liste (haïku en trois éléments disjoints). L'auteur les a habilement lié pour en faire un discours elliptique très économe et très efficace. A noter l'effet de surprise en L3 où on aurait plutôt attendu des miettes. Cette technique donne une résonnance particulière au discours.

Keywords

New-Year crumb humour table star

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* glissement - Shifting from one meaning to another.
Shift of discourse from one meaning to another. It's the whole discourse that changes meaning. Not to be confused with the surprise, which is an unexpected element that does not deeply change the meaning of the discourse.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* S1 - Folded sentence.
Haiku in one folded sentence.

Effects: decod - Decoding the structure.
Affects the time required to understand the speech by the time required to decode the structure. Groups the elements by physical and temporal caesuras.

At the level: 0-form - Formal level
Formal appearance, written forms.

Description level: 1-pres - Formal representation


* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Miniature - The Miniature.


* D_GrandPetit - Big <> Little.


* D_HautBas - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

All the author's haikus >>>