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Paris
la nuit
du métro


Serge Tomé, Belgique
liv 2004-03-1

Commentaire.

Ce n'est pas un haïku. Mais il en utilise certaines techniques.

Je dois dire tout d'abord que je l'ai écrit en arrivant un soir à Paris, sur la ligne RER C vers le Pont de l'Alma. Je ne me suis pas aperçu tout de suite en sortant des tunnels que la nuit était tombée. Cela m'est venu instinctivement à l'esprit.

L1 et L2 forment une formule "Paris la nuit" utilisée dans les prospectus touristiques. La séparation en deux phrases permet de réutiliser L2 dans la liaison L2-L3 qui est une image poétique (figure interdite dans le haïku).

L1-L2 et L2-L3 sont des phrases emboitées, avec L2 comme articulation. Elle joue aussi au niveau sémantique car elle sépare deux images :

- L1-L2 : le plaisir, la nuit ouverte, le ciel
- L2-L3 : la nuit souterraine, mécanique

Ce n'est pas un haïku car :

- il ne s'agence pas en court-long-court
- il utilise une image poétique (L2-L3)
- c'est une phrase repliée

Keywords

metro Paris night

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* poesie - Use of poetical devices.
Use of poetical devices.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-style - Writing style.


* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed (structural element 'clos') and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

It gives a view on one of the elements of the situation.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-aut - Author's role


* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. Archetypes are structures that have aggregated semes (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

e.g. Night, Fire, Death, Fall, Frontier...

Night: gloomy, dark, cold, threatening (lack of visibility of potential dangers), dangerous (legacy of ancient times), loss of Light, linked to the Unconscious through dreams and nightmares, silent world, mysterious, unknown, populated by fantastical beings.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Nuit - The Night.

La nuit primale, avec son obscurité, ses "dangers", ses mystères et nos peurs millénaires.

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